Miss B Feedback

Today Miss B gave the group some very detailed and important feedback. A lot of it was based upon making our sequence more believable which is a very important part of film and I researched this on my individual blog for stage 1.

-When the villain attacks the detective, at the point where the light turns on and off it looks awful as it makes absolutley no sense and everytime the light comes back on the camera needs to focus. Miss proposed the idea to do it without the light flickering on and off and maybe focus it around a POV shot of the villain coming up behind the detection as he's working.

- Also the build up isn't quite right. The villain just appears out of no where and is presented to the audience with out any infomation of how he got in. This is important as it needs to be realistic and if the detective puts the latch on the door how does he actually get in? I came up with the idea that the villain is already in the house and all we need to show is him hiding or just his feet to let the audience know the detective isn't alone. It thus creates the effect that you know something the main character doesn't. Miss also suggested him coming in the way he goes out, however, I think the first idea is better and it wont make our opening sequence drag on for too long. She also suggested having the detetive hear something as he's working and getting startled just to let the audience know that something isn't quite right and they are more prepared for the scene where he gets hurt. We might shoot both so we have options in the edit room.

- The shot where the detective puts the post-it note on the board needs to be closer so the audience can see it and acknowledge whats going on. Then also in the flashback.

-The gunshot at the end of the sequence maybe a little too unrealistic as he is a private detective and that maybe a little too unprofessional. Miss suggested that maybe the gun goes closer to his head and he says something like 'Don't move'.

Matt